06/09/2013 – WeWriWa

celtic-knot8 Sentences from: Loyalties

Thank you for stopping by. These sentences immediately follow last week’s #8. Hope you enjoy.

When the flickering ceased, the woman lowered her left shoulder, luring Vane closer in anticipation of her next move. Instead of the expected, she dropped her sword and strode forward, inside his guard, and slammed a fist into his square jaw with a crack even Clovis heard. Her last opponent collapsed like a felled tree.

Bystanders groaned and muttered.

The woman bent to retrieve her weapon, and a star-shaped pendant on a silver-blue chain swung free of her tunic, sparkling and flickering in the fading rays of the setting sun. Recognizing the source of the light he had seen during the fight, Clovis’ gaze flew to her face. He stepped forward, the familiar scent of lilacs, Dryn’s tell-tale, wafting past him. “Dryn, you old battleaxe, it is you! How the blazes are you?”

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24 thoughts on “06/09/2013 – WeWriWa

    • Hanni,
      Thanks for stopping by. Glad you enjoyed it and want to read more.
      I still want to know what happens to the house in your snippet.
      Susan

    • Veronica,
      Dryn is interesting and is pushing to have a bigger role in the story than she was supposed to 🙂 Glad you stopped by and enjoyed.
      Susan

    • Sue
      Thanks for stopping by and reading – and no I wouldn’t want to mess with Dryn either.
      Susan

    • Elaine
      Thanks for stopping by and reading. Glad you enjoyed. And yes – Clovis is quite surprised and puzzled by her presence.
      Susan

    • Linda
      Thanks for stopping by and reading. He hasn’t seen her in 15 years and she is the last person he expected to see here.
      Susan

  1. Ouch! Expect the unexpected, or end up on the floor.

    I don’t think you need the last comma in the first sentence: “…luring Vane closer in anticipation of her next move.”

    • Caitlin
      Thanks for stopping by and commenting …. commas are NOT my friends. Hope you enjoyed.
      Susan

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