06/02/2013 – WeWriWa

celtic-knot8 Sentences from: Loyalties

These sentences immediately follow last week’s #8

This woman executed the fighting forms Wind over Water, Song of the Wolves and Dance of the Plains, with such speed and skill, even though he knew what came next, Clovis had difficulty following the flash of her blade. The movements disarmed red-headed Jace and brought her close enough for her sword-hilt to land solidly against his skull. A kick to the mid-section doubled Ryne over, and flipped his long blond hair over his eyes. She followed through with a dagger-butt to his head. He sent a puff of dust skyward as he sprawled on the ground. A quick pivot put her face to face with Vane, a light danced and flashed across Clovis’ view, blinding him.


(WeWriWa) is a group of writers who agree to post 8 sentences of either a published work or an unpublished work on their blog on Sunday. Those who have signed up (and anyone else) has the pleasure of traveling (virtually) to samples of different authors’ stories, novels etc. Great fun!



28 thoughts on “06/02/2013 – WeWriWa

  1. Hello! I could have sworn I’ve been to this blog before but after reading through some of the post I realized it’s new to me. Nonetheless, I’m definitely delighted I found it and I’ll be book-marking and checking back frequently!

  2. Lovely – I had to go back and read the previous week’s snippet. I love fight scenes and you’ve executed this one well. I could see the movements!

  3. Fight scenes can be so difficult. You really keep the tension tight and the pace flowing smoothly. Great job and a great 8!

  4. Great description of sword fighting, and I like the names of the moves… it makes her sound like a woman who is intense… who loves what she does and does it well. Her opponent is a male, which makes it all the more intense. Good job!

    • Hi Susan
      Thanks for stopping by and reading. Glad you liked it and I’m glad the description works.

  5. You do get a lot of description in a short space, and it’s not easy to pull that off and still have it make sense! I haven’t read your other snippets so I’m losing some context, but I can picture the scene and I pick up that Clovis is probably feeling some fear and admiration for the woman. Thanks for sharing this part.

    • Hi, Marcia
      Thanks for your comment and stopping by. Also glad the context was discoverable w/o the previous snippets.

    • Sue
      I’m glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping by and reading. Always a nice impetus to learn someone enjoyed my writing.

    • Jess
      Thanks for stopping by and for the comment. Glad you enjoyed it–which is a nice impetus to continue writing.

  6. Being a new reader, I had to peek back at last week’s for some context, but once I’d got that, I really like this section. I immediately wonder what she could be, and exactly why Clovis knows what comes next – if it’s a known set of movements like a kata or if he has a power to see future or just remembers from 15 years before…
    A very intriguing excerpt!!

  7. Nice Description of the fight scene. I wish you all the luck with Treason’s Trail. Congratulations!

    • Hi, Mona
      Thanks for stopping by and commenting. Have my fingers crossed also – a “salesperson” I am not – so we shall see.

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